Disclaimer: Naruto is an ongoing Japanese Manga series written
and illustrated by Masashi Kishimoto with an Animé adaptation. The Manga
is published by Shueisha in Japan, and Viz Media in the United States,
Canada, and UK, and it is serialized by Shonen Jump. The TV Animé is
directed by Hayato Date, and licensed by Aniplex in Japan, Viz Media in
the United States, and Manga Entertainment in the UK.
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Characters: Naruto & Hinata
Rating: MF [Mature Freakz]
Plot Association: Season 8, after perhaps episode 181
Rating: MF [Mature Freakz]
Plot Association: Season 8, after perhaps episode 181
Introduction:
Another violent chapter was over—one filled with
many sacrifices and grief. Indeed. The senseless destruction had cease for a while. And although Naruto had not attained the
revenge he sought, found something better instead. After all, nothing good ever
came from extracting vengeance, only the birth of more carnage.
He was told of events that took place
decades ago, events that Jiraiya hadn't the chance to share. He met and fought
his senior student, Nagato,
whom had masked his identity behind the alias, Pain, and was presumed the mastermind behind Akatsuki.
During their fierce duel, a most difficult question was posed, one
that weighed more than Naruto figured he could shoulder. It was the demand for an answer, a resolve, the same that was
entrusted to him by his sensei.
Jiraiya also searched valiantly for the right answer throughout his life, but failed to discover it even upon his dying breath. However, the welfare
of Naruto's village, his people—no, the entire world was dependent upon the
merit of his answer... the answer of a mere child, a sixteen-year-old.
Time bears regard for no one. The moment of
truth eventually came, at the epilogue of their epic battle, but Naruto still hadn’t found a resolve. He did, however, discover the key to attain it, which was the will to
believe and never give up; to push
on despite the pain and change he may encounter.
“One day,
I'll end this curse! If there is a thing such as peace, then I shall grasp it!
There's something even more important than a way to achieve it, and that's the
power to believe in it!” With these profound and motivational words,
Jiraiya was inspired to write his first book, which he hoped
would induce a revolution that would forever change the world. These were the
exact words once spoken but forgotten by Nagato (Pain) as a child, and upon reminder, Naruto succeeded in changing the man's cold heart.
Nagato eventually came to realize that he had betrayed
himself, betrayed his past
ideals. He had cast aside and forgotten his believes
and moral standards, those of which Naruto had desperately clung to despite the same adversities he faced.
In the end, Nagato decided to confide in
Naruto. His sensei, Jiraiya, had entrusted the boy with his will of
fire, and so he would do the same.
With one final act
to justify his change of heart, one wrought of charity, which he hoped would
help him to atone for his many sins—even if just a tad—Nagato sacrificed himself to revive all the lives
he had claimed in Konoha.
However, Jiraiya was still gone. Peace was restored
to the village and everyone was thankful and happy. But Naruto was still
scarred. A piece of him was still missing—a large fragment
that perhaps even with the help of time, could not be restored.
Prologue:
It was approximately 12:01 in the early
morning, one minute after the day of that great cataclysm—the day when Pain reigned and his wrath and godlike
powers were known by the people of the hidden leaf, but even more so, Naruto
Uzumaki.
The night culminated with Naruto sitting
upright in bed, just as it did when he learnt of Jiraiya's death. In this moment, he
knew nothing but blissful memories of the past, as the present reality was too painful to dwell. But these joyful memories
could only last for so long, and even within them, he still ached.
His heart felt like lead in his chest, with
each beat pulling him deeper into a dark abyss that was the essence of pain and
suffering. His body was weak and numb; he couldn’t help but get sucked in, and
a part of him welcomed it.
Just why did granny Tsunade had to send Ero-Sennin
on such a dangerous mission? It was reckless! He may have been one of the three
legendary Sennin, but even they make mistakes—Orochimaru, for instance.
Naruto’s eyes narrowed as he fell prone to reminiscence, and a
fiercer heat dawns his stomach.
The
Night Following Jiraiya’s Death:
A grief-stricken Naruto
sat up in bed, silent, his head hung as he mourned his sensei's demise.
Adjacent to his
bed, in the middle of the room, was a table. And on that table
was a well-prepared cup of noodles, a cold bottle of water and a soda that sat
sulking as of neglect.
It felt as if
a dark, cloud-like shroud made of torment was lingering over his head. It was invisible
but potent, and the intensity of his constricting chest justified that fact.
If that old ass
toad was really the Ero-Sennin's master, then why didn't he save him? Why did
everything have to turn out this way? If Ero-Sennin were Hokage, he would never
have sent
granny Tsunade on that mission... never.
Hoping to cleanse
his heart of this ever-growing grudge and to flee
the ravenous beast that obviously fed upon the light of his soul—replacing
it with that of darkness—Naruto
left his room.
As soon as he made
his way down the stairs of the apartment complex, he looked up at the neon
sign of a
store that depicted:
“24-hour shop.”
Dazed, he
would have stridden right past it—but for some reason, the sudden thought
of ice cream nudged his awareness. It made him imagine a
small measure of closure.
Now, he
sat on a bench beneath a streetlight, his back arched, his forearms resting on his legs. It was quiet, except for the slightly distinct
sound of moths tacking the bulb of the street light overhead, and
the screech of crickets thoroughly hidden in the forestry.
Naruto heard
nothing. And was completely oblivious to the beautiful spectacle of the village
from where he sat. He only saw the memories he shared with his sensei up to
this point, skipping
through his mind, like a flipbook... distant, and in a somber shade of gray.
His icicle had
started to melt.
A single droplet of its sweet flavour
fell to the ground, soon accompanied
by many more of a different hue and flavour that
was quickly savoured by the ground—bittersweet. It was his tears. They rippled down his
face, like a broken dam in dire
need of repair. He wept, yet his face was straight. He
still could not accept the fact that Jiraiya was gone, that his sensei was no
longer apart this world.
Naruto
honestly thought he had escaped the clutches of the vile
fiend that lingered in his room—devouring his
composure and provoking him—but it would seem the despicable creature had
trailed him here.
How persistent. It would seem the demon had no intention of leaving until it had its
fill.
All of a sudden,
out of the pitch-black
darkness, he heard a subtle voice:
“Naruto.” It was
Iruka, and our hero did quick work to
dry his tears upon realization. But
it was not long before more tricked down his cheeks.
The man took a
seat at the opposing end of the bench. “I heard about Jiraiya-sama,” he said with apparent condolence. His eyes then
swayed emotionally, a gesture
that won Naruto's attention.
“I wanted him to
keep watching over me. I wanted to have him watch me become Hokage.” Naruto
smiled, a wanly smile. “I only let Ero-Sennin see my bad sides. I...”
“Jiraiya-sama was
always praising you,” Iruka interjected. “He always spoke proudly of you,
saying that you were like his own grandchild.”
Naruto's eyes
widened.
“He believed that
you were the only one who was going to inherit his will. In his mind, he had no
doubt about you becoming a great Hokage.” The man's eyes softened sympathetically.
“Jiraiya-sama will keep watching you. Even now, from somewhere...”
Slowly, Iruka
stood and gazed up at
a luminous full moon. “He wouldn't praise you if he saw you being depressed.
So, just continue being the person we've all come to know—the
person he always praised.”
He
knelt before an enthralled Naruto and reached for the melting icicle. “You
can't be depressed forever. Jiraiya-sama, one of the Legendary Sennin,
acknowledged you.” He broke it into two halves, a stick on either piece. “His
excellent student.”
Naruto was moved, and
a smile soon stretched his lips. Then he reached for the stick of icicle. “Thank
you... Iruka-sensei.”
It was the crack of dawn now. The morning's
star tinted the neighboring clouds that cradled it—like a mother would while
nursing her child—a thick sheet of gold. It slowly rose up from beyond the
distant horizon, as though it had just awoken from a deep slumber, highlighting
the vast, rich landscapes and rooftops
with its warm, saffron glow.
With the deity's glorious rebirth, the darkness dwindled, as
did the large quantity of humidity that rode upon the carefree wind. But while the sun may have vanquished
the darkness and replaced it with its radiant light, Naruto couldn't say the same for the darkness manifested by his sorrow. It clung to him, like the many
feathers on a messenger hawk.
It is said that
time heals all
wounds, but he was skeptical as to whether or not his agonizing would ever end.
The morning's dew still hung on the
greenery, glistening, and it was not long before the birds commenced their soothing
melody. Perhaps it was a notification for the nocturnal spices to withdraw into
their homes, while for others—such as a beautiful
young maiden of a certain clan we all know—a sign to wake up and play her role.
Today, she had plans—a harmless scheme born of solicitude to
cheer up a certain someone. And although
she had absolutely no clue as to where she would have attained the courage,
was adamant about going through with it nonetheless.
8:03 a.m. It was nothing short of a miracle that Naruto
was able to fall asleep—and it was not a restless 5 1/2 hours of
twisting and turning, either. The moment his eyes closed, reality fell still
and silent. Fortunately, he was also spared from having any tiresome dreams or
awful nightmares.
He lay on his
stomach, like a piece of log, quiet and motionless for these few fleeting
hours. Perhaps
that repulsive creature had devoured
to its fill and finally departed—granting him that peace and tranquility
he sought in order to meet sweet closure.
It was soon
apparent, however, that such a conclusion was merely wishful thinking for as
soon as Naruto grew more self-conscious, the demon was back—hungry and ready for more. Oh, joy! Torment and frustration lingered in his company
anew, like the stink on a skunk. And at one point, he actually entertained the thought of
Orochimaru's forbidden techniques—possibly, to amend what had gone
terribly awry.
All of a sudden, to help shake off the
thought, there was a low, tentative knock at the door, which characteristically spoke to the
likeness that it was a female. And the fact that the intervals were so very far
apart meant that this person was definitely not Sakura, but probably a female still
nonetheless.
Roused from the shallow depth to which he was asleep, Naruto lazily sat up
in bed. His eyes were weary and his face pale. He yawned and then scratched his stomach, before shuffling
off the bed.
When the door screeched open, he scrunched up his face and narrowed his
eyes at the intensity of the vibrant morning’s
light and saturated colours. His eyes widened, however, when he noted it
was Hinata that was standing at his doorstep. And she blushed and averted her gaze, when his eyes roamed from her face to
her torso and back again.
She was presented in an ivory,
spaghetti-strap dress with black, silky frills at the end. The material clung
to every voluptuous curve of her burnish, petite figure. She looked like an
angel that had wandered to earth from heaven and lost her way. And somewhere, in the corner of his mind, Naruto knew she was his sole partner, his symmetrical
half, his
beautiful maiden—unseen, untouched, and her flavours still a mystery.
“H-Hinata... what're you doing here?” he demanded in his
surprise, his voice childish but coated in a layer of charm that made the
girl's heat rise.
The mild scent of him,
from where she stood, and his familiar yet unique aura made her heart crash
against her chest and her lips part in response. But she had lost the air in
her lungs to speak. She wondered then if he had any idea how breathtaking his
voice was, and the force of his eyes, however tired they may seem.
“Na…Na…Naruto-kun. Um”—she shook her head,
blinking—”good morning,” she greeted with a slight curtsy, after she could breathe again. She had
never seen him in his pajamas before. Well, not since he got older. And just
the sight of that made her lose the balance of composure she took over an hour to
accumulate this morning.
“Hinata,” he murmured her name, staring at the young damsel with that clueless expression he wore so
well, making it even
that harder for her to breathe. At this rate, it was almost certain that she
would eventually faint. The thought was embarrassing to say the least.
Hinata could clearly hear the erratic throbbing of her heart. She
couldn't help but wonder if that was normal or life threatening. Nervousness continued to
arrest her body. Soon, she was unconsciously meddling with her thumbs, while the other fingers clasp the picnic basket in
her hands.
“I...I made some breakfast,” she struggled, “and hoped we could have it together.” She bowed
her head and lifted the hamper in her hands. The fabulous
material of her thigh-length dress cascaded over her buttocks in a fashion that
could steal the wind from any man.
“Nothing's gonna happen
if you keep moping around.” Naruto heard
Shikamaru's voice resound in his mind, the moment he frowned with little
interest in regards to the girl's request.
“You're not in a position to act in such a way anymore. It's
the time to become the one that entrusts rather than being entrusted to.”
The shinobi in
distress tried to seem wholehearted as he cast Hinata a grateful smile, and then his eyes softened somewhere between
enthusiasm and grief. “I would love that,” he agreed. “Thank you, Hinata. Please... come in,” he invited in a warm voice, fully opening the door and stepping aside.
“R-Really,” the girl seem astound as she straightened her bend. “D-Does that
mean... Na…Naruto-kun and I... are on a—” her voice thinned and trailed off the moment she realized the notion
upon her lips.
“Huh?”
Hinata closed her eyes before her darling prince
charming could indentify that treacherous telling gleam in them, and then she heaved
a rueful smile and fanned her hand in a dismissing gesture.
“It...It's nothing.”
“Uh-Un,” he closed the door behind her. “Ah, sorry about the mess,” he cupped
the back of his head in embarrassment, when Hinata stilled against the
scowl of untidiness. “I haven't really gotten around to cleaning... and—” his mood suddenly shifted to that of misery, as he recalled the
training he had undergone at Mount Myouboku after learning of Jiraiya’s death.
“That...That's okay, Naruto-kun,” Hinata swayed her hand to win his
attention before he could drown in an irreversible state of depression. “I don't mind at all... really.”
“Err, are you sure?” his gaze was sharp and inquiring. But he
seemed more relieved and reassured when Hinata nodded her head without
hesitation. “Okay, well... I'm going to have a shower. We can eat after I
get out. Make yourself
comfortable, okay... I won’t be long.”
Hinata's heart skipped a
beat and her eyes widened. Fortunately, Naruto had already turned around before
her countenance could catch his eye and arouse his curiosity.
No matter how much she
suppressed, Hinata couldn’t resist picturing him standing in that bathroom,
clad in nothing but soapsuds, with water trickling down his arms and chest and
regions farther down south. Her cheeks brightened with colour, as she further
thought about sacred areas below his waist. She barely knew about the state of
hers much less to have the audacity to think about his.
Under any circumstances,
was it normal for a young virgin girl to have these thoughts, whenever she
looked at a boy she liked... a lot? She hadn’t a clue; her boy-liking history
(none) gave her few reference points to work with.
When she realized
he was standing in the door leading to the other room, watching her, Hinata
stood sincerely, like an obedient schoolgirl awaiting further instructions from
her esteemed lecture. “Umm, okay… In the
meantime, I will prepare the
table.”
He gazed unswervingly before he left.
His eyes were gentle but intense, and it seemed to make her bones turn soft. A
second longer and she would be seeping through the cracks in the floorboard
right now, like spilled milk.
Na...Naruto-kun's room, a curious Hinata sighed heavily, studying the small space with evident
admiration, taking
in every bit of detail that she could. I have never been in here before, unlike
Sakura and some of the others.
She
took in a deep breath, filling her nose
with the scent of
him, and upon exhaling—concluded that she would do quick work to clean his room.
Naruto saved the village. This
deed could not repay the debt;
it paled in comparison—but
she wanted to prove that she was most grateful in any way that she could. However, was that really the reason
why she was so willing to do his chores? Did she really decide to come here
today purely because she wanted to offer her condolences and gratitude? If
nothing else,
it was a good excuse.
Hinata blew out a sigh of relief and then rubbed her forehead with the back of
her hand. “Well, that ought to do it... and just in time, too.” She looked around the room with
evident satisfaction and then smiled at her grand accomplishment.
The
room seem to sparkle now as opposed to glowering earlier, as if it were thanking the princess for her effort and a job well done. The bed
was perfectly spread, laundry neatly folded and stacked in
the basket, furniture
thoroughly polished and the rug beneath the table was dusted off. Finally, she had properly
disposed off all the garbage lying around, opened up all the windows to let some fresh air in, and prepared the table with the food she had made at home.
Within moments, the door adjacent to the bed suddenly opened, that lazy squeal sending Hinata's
heart crashing violently against her rib cage. She lost the air in her lungs at
the devastating collision. Hopefully, her insurance that was composure could
cover it.
Naruto sauntered casually into the bedroom. He was wrapped in nothing
but an aqua bathrobe and a cream towel around his neck. The spectacle had a
defenceless Hinata's entire face turning pink...rapidly!
She noted that he
smelled more of soap now than his original intoxicating fragrance. Perhaps that
was for the best, though, she could recognize her disappointment.
The sweet scent of
soap upon his skin made her remember the image of him in the bath, garbed in
nothing but suds. The thought made her eyes automatically begin to drift
downward but by god, she had to stop herself by the time she got to his
stomach. She knew danger. Her blood was electric in her veins, and her heart was galloping, like an untamed black stallion in
her chest. Still, she gawked at him while sitting on
her heels around the knee-length table, admiring his irresistible flair.
His hair was still damp and spiky from the shower—a beautiful, sleek plain the hue of rich honey that lay seductively over his forehead. Tendrils were
everywhere, but her gaze soon
drifted to his perfect lips and then to his eyes. They were the colour of the
ocean—deep and filled with untold mysteries, just like the calm misty blue.
She hunted for the answer to a particular question in them, but the sea was too vast for her to discover what she sought.
She studied the broad cut of his shoulders and the long, strong length of his
arms. He was so handsome...
“Wooow,” Naruto exclaimed—disrupting Hinata’s
examining gaze—practically drooling at the magnificent appearance and smell of the various kinds of gourmet dishes.
The combination of
aromas filled the room, some seeming to take on a physical form so as to caress
beneath his chin, coaxing him to sample, to dominate what he craved. And he craved everything.
He may be an
epicure, but he knew those who were not enthusiasts couldn't possibly tell the
difference between that and a gluttonous pig. In other words, he would have to
mind his manners in Hinata's presence—though, restraint was never one of
Naruto's strong points.
“Breakfast”, he
recalled her saying. This was more like a feast for at least 20 or more people.
It was unbelievable that so much food could fit in that small picnic basket.
Was there an alternate dimension in that thing?! He supposed he really shouldn’t
be surprised. There were almost no limitations to the possibilities of the
ninja arts, after all.
Everything looked
so delicious, from the donuts and sugar-dumplings, to the fried rice and
lobsters. And, of
course, Naruto neglected everything that had his face
drawn all over it, literally. The sight of that always gave him the heebie-jeebies—heck, eating himself didn't exactly seem
normal. It was downright creepy and uncomfortable.
“Everything... everything looks so amazing, Hinata,” a salivating
Naruto
complimented openly, his eyes
never leaving the food. “Did you do all this yourself?”
“Uh-Un,” she verified, tapping the tip of her forefingers together. “I wanted to do something special for Naruto-kun.”
Touched, the
warrior's eyes
softened. She could see his appreciation. She could
almost feel it.
“Hinata,” his lips curved beautifully. “Thank you... really. I needed this.”
She beamed at him and nodded her head, like a child who
had just satisfied her taste buds on a double serving of her favorite ice cream
Sunday. “You're welcome.”
All of a sudden, Naruto started to look around, agitated, and then blurted out a long, high-pitched: “Eeeeh? M-My room,” he stuttered as the towel fell to the ground from around his
nape. And he pointed a trembling index finger in an open space that was perhaps
the filthiest. “It's—”
“Clean,” a proud Hinata took the liberty of finishing the rickety sentence, somehow pleased by his flustered state. “I tidied the place up a bit… while Naruto-kun was taking a bath.”
Naruto rubs the back of his head, shamefaced, and
yet a half-wide grin stretched his lips. “I-I don't know
what to say.” I thought you said
you didn't have a problem with it, he pondered, pouting inwardly.
“Y-you don't have to thank me, Naruto-kun,” Hinata said meekly, looking down on her hands that rest
atop her thighs as she tried to gather and retain courage. “I-I wanted to do this.” Almost automatically, she pressed a curved index finger to her lips and glanced up at him from beneath
her eyelashes. “I hope you like it.”
She swore she saw him blush then, but he
colour vanished from his cheeks so fast that she wondered if she might have
imagined it.
“Hinata,” Naruto pronounced her name in a way he had never
done before, a manner that made her
skin spring goose bumps. Was he extracting sweet vengeance? “It's amazing,” his voice was low, complimentary, and almost seductive, if she didn't know better. “You're amazing.”
His unexpected,
velvet-like words and that captivating gleam that flashed in his eyes made her
gasp, and she dropped her head before she could lose anymore of her valuable
composure.
His gorgeous
face—eyes, nose, cheeks, lips and all was such a distraction and a hazard to
her poise that Hinata decided to try and not look at it anymore than courtesy
absolutely demanded. His sweet words were obviously more of a threat than she
bargained for. Watching
him secretly was a more prudent approach, if she really valued her
consciousness.
“Let's dig in!” Naruto said when he was
certain she would not reply. Heck, even Sai could have easily pointed out that
the girl was highly sensitive to his words. She was excessively shy, especially
when the one she admired was in close proximity.
“Uh-Un, let's...”
“Itadakimatsu,” Naruto said musically, when he had plopped himself down on a
cushion, crossed-legged. He quickly reached for his
chopsticks and detached the pair while making some blissful sound with a watery mouth.
Our hero made haste
to sample everything
from each dish, evidently chewing less than the appropriate number of times the doctor
ordered. He indulged his taste buds on everything except, of course, the menus that had a very crude art of his head depicted on it.
But alas, it soon became apparent
that he might succumb to temptation, despite how disturbing they appeared with
an over familiar face. He couldn't help it—there was a shortage of pastries and
Hinata just had a talent for making them. They were absolutely delectable! It
was a recipe with an obsessive flavor, which guaranteed the young maiden absolute
possession of his very soul!Narrator: Okay, I admit, that was a bit too melodramatic. I apologize sorry :3
Everything was scrumptious, and god knows Naruto would have French kissed his ten fingers
if Hinata wasn’t here, despite the fact
that no form of food was smeared on them. He may as well do it, since he might
have already showed the girl that gluttonous persona he wanted to conceal.
“Have as much as you'd like,” Hinata informed, having already ate to her
fill. Now, she watched him; watched in love and affection as he enjoyed her
personal home cooking—wait what?!
She blushed fiercely and averted her face subsequent to the
realization of her open emotions.
“Thanks, I will. Everything tastes so amazing. You'll make a great wife one day, Hinata.”
Naruto didn't look
up when he said those words, and maybe it was a good thing that he hadn't. But
the open
remark still made Hinata's face heat and she almost said his name in
response, on a tone that
was everything but erotic. She might have stifled the amorous moaning of his
name, but a breath still escaped her lips, one that had enough wind to win our warrior's undivided attention.
“Hmm,” Naruto stopped
and arched one brow
in question. His soft,
sky-like eyes were appraising even as noodles extend from his mouth to the bowel. “Seriously, I really love your cooking,” he mumbled with his mouth full, and then
like a noisy vacuum cleaner—sucked the rest of the noodles into his mouth and started chewing.
The sheer sound and
sight had Hinata's lips parting in a sultry fashion—but the noodles were not
what interested her. That certainly was not what she craved, not in the least.
Her heart pulse as
further thoughts invade her mind, but not just her heart... never just her
heart when he was so close to her. This wasn't the first or second time that
Hinata had felt this strange sensation—this strong and consistent convulsion
below her waist. And it always seems to occur while she’s in Naruto's company
for an extended period... alone.
For some reason,
she wanted him to put his hands on her; she wanted to be touched… everywhere.
She once thought that a simple hug may have sufficed, but it was becoming clear
that it would not. Was it appropriate to think or feel this way?
She soon got a hold
of herself and addressed his latest commentary with a remark that was hardly
auditable. She wondered what her face looks like, and tried unsuccessfully to
relax, but the electric current that seemed to be originating from somewhere in
his body never slacked.
Occasionally,
Hinata would permit herself a quick glance in his direction. But he was too
caught up in eating to realize. It was a wonderful treat.
Abruptly, Naruto
reached forward to retrieve a dish with jelly-stuffed rice balls, and the
sudden proximity of his long fingers to her hand sent her heart into frenzied
palpitations. Hinata struggled to keep her face composed, though, her cheeks
brightened with colour.
The corners of his lips
pulled up into a crooked smile, stopping her breath and her heart, before he
bit down into a rice ball in hand. Delight spread over his face as the
cloud-like filling melted in his mouth. And his facial expression almost seemed
like an invitation to lean forward—despite the nerve-racking mortification—and
pinch away the grains of rice that smeared the corner of his mouth, one-by-one.
Hinata battled
valiantly to fight off the urge, for she knew any level of contact she had with
him could possibly have her bursting into flames, flames that would be nearly
impossible to extinguish.
The princess felt a
lot of emotions: confusion, sadness, frustration and even a tinge of anger—because
to this day, she was certain she completely knew herself and had achieved
almost full control over her body through intense training and meditation.
Yet, at this very
moment, she was struggling to steady the reins of her control, to subdue her
rising desire. It was consuming her rationality.
“I'm sorry about Jiraiya-sama,” Hinata blurted out, showing no hesitation in wanting to offer her deepest condolences or rather to
change the subject. Initially, she did not intend to speak of the man—yet, it
was either she changed the energy in the atmosphere or do something very stupid
and nigh unforgiveable.
Like she planned—a
disturbing sacrifice—the spark in the atmosphere shifted; a knife pierced her
lust, but her heart was run through, as well. She could only imagine what
Naruto felt, and her chest tightened at the thought. Now it was a battle to
hold back her tears.
There was an awkward,
prolonged moment of silence. Hinata could feel the thick waves of depression
rolling off him, and she could think of nothing to say.
“Hinata... it's fine,” he finally said after a while,
failing miserably at sounding wholehearted and unscathed, assuming that was his
intention.
She glanced up at
him, but he was staring into his bowl of noodle soup, his eyebrows pulling
together.
“It's no big deal. I'm alright now. Someone told me that
Ero-Sennin believed I was the only one who was going to inherit his will of fire, that in his mind, he had no doubt about my
becoming a great Hokage. I was also told that he wouldn't praise me if he saw
me being so depressed.” As he spoke, the dejected edge left his voice and colour returned to his
pale face. “I have a mission resting squarely upon my shoulders that was left by Ero-Sennin to fulfill, so I don't have any time to be moping around. I need to get stronger if
I hope to bring to fruition, not only my sensei's dreams, but mine, as
well. Also,” his eyes
narrowed in determination, “I haven't given up on Sasuke.”
Hinata's mood seemed to change in that
instant, particularly at
the key words: “moping around.” It shifted to something around the lines of indignation—a level of indignation that obviously
outweighed the fact that she was probably being a tad selfish and insensitive.
Of course, she was
impressed. Of course, she was proud. But she felt neglected and upset for the
most part. She wanted him to share his burdens, and the pleasures of his
achievements. She wanted to be recognized. She wanted to know what he thought
of her existence. She wanted to be his... through everything.
Hinata was suddenly
headstrong—adamant to learn of Naruto's feelings toward her, whether or not
they would bring her absolute disappointment and grief or immeasurable
happiness and satisfaction.
It occurred to her
then that perhaps that point in time, when she had confessed her love to him on
the battlefield, should remain lost in the flow of time, if he did not feel the
same way she did about him.
“N-Naruto-kun,” his name was hot upon her lips, and she
averted her eyes, just her eyes, as a precaution to preserve the little courage she had
gathered. “What—” she hesitated,
dropping her eyes—"what do you think of me? D-Do you think I am pretty?” Her words were hardly
above a whisper, as she tried to mask the note of petulance in her voice. They
were so low that she had a hard time hearing them over the loud thrashing of
her heart. She wondered if he could.
A sudden flash of
surprise over his face answered her question.
Their eyes held, and the
silence deepened—and changed. Flickers of the electricity she had felt moments
past began to charge the atmosphere, as he gazed unrelentingly in her eyes.
It wasn't until her head
started to swim did Hinata realize she wasn't breathing. When she drew in a
jagged breath, breaking the stillness, she averted her eyes again, a fierce
flush staining those plump cheeks.
But was embarrassment really
the emotion she should be feeling? Was it not despair and sorrow? Naruto’s
hesitation gave root to speculation, and Hinata held fast to the notion that
the fleeing gleam she spied in his eyes were supposedly of uncertainty, pity
and disgust. In other words, her love was unrequited.
Naruto averted his gaze
suddenly, his eyes guarded. And Hinata bit her lip and was glad he couldn't
know just how much that hurt. It was better that way; he had enough anguish to
deal with as it is. His ordeal over these few months has been harsh and
unrelenting.
She hadn't realized the
moisture in her eyes had spilled over. She quickly rubbed the back of her hand
across her flushed cheek, and sure enough, traitor tears were there... betraying
her.
Naruto frowned, heartbroken,
when he saw tears in her eyes. His facial expression was of agony, as though the
blade of a samurai’s sword stabbed through him.
“H-Hinata—” he called, but was almost immediately
obstructed.
“Do you remember what I said before I fought
Pain?”
The question made her heart clench despite her solemn
countenance. And
Naruto gasped in response, the inquiry evoking that memory.
Pain held his hand
forward, intent visible in those calm yet sinister eyes. They were deep, cold, and sad—a
void filled with malicious ambitions and chaotic philosophies. “It's time for
you to come with me,” the demigod said, towering over the sage like a bad
omen in his black cape. Naruto
gasped, bounded there on the barren ground by the man's black iron
rods.
The
demon's pupils enlarged in preparations for his next heinous move,
but just then, quick
footsteps pierced the tension that had formed between the two.
Time seemed to slow to the moment,
when Hinata leaped into the air, capturing the titan’s
inquisitive gaze.
She attacked the
villain upon her descent,
but missed, her assault
creating a large crater beneath her.
How horrible, she
said mentally, when the dust had cleared. She looked to her comrade
in distress and then back to her adversary.
Naruto-kun's movements are sealed away due to
those rods. “I
won't let you lay a finger on Naruto-kun!”
“Reinforcements,”
Pain assumed,
sporting that ever-composed countenance.
“Why did you come
here,” Naruto demanded, obviously not enthused in the least.
“Hurry
up—run!
You don't stand a chance against him!”
The beautiful
maiden made some sound, something matching a breath
of protest. “I know that I'm being selfish,” she admitted in a subtle tone.
“What are you
talking about?” Naruto was frantic. “You
don't need to be here! It's too dangerous!”
“I stand here on
my will alone.”
She
remembers
a scene from
the past,
when an adult of her clan was carrying her off,
after Naruto had saved her from a gang of bullies. “This time, I will save you. I've always been a crybaby and
always just gave up before trying. I kept thinking everything I did was wrong, but
you showed me the right path to take, Naruto-kun! I've always been chasing you.
I always wanted to catch up to you, to walk with you, to be with you. You
changed me, Naruto-kun—your
smile saved me. That's why I'm not afraid...to die protecting you...because...I
love you, Naruto-kun.”
Slowly, his eyes glum, Naruto
lowered
his head, which, in Hinata's opinion—seemed
like a gesture stating the fact that he could not bear the weight of the world
and her feelings for him at the same time. The child of prophecy of which The Great
Toad Sage spoke, could not have a family while the world was engulfed in such
darkness.
But needless to
say, Hinata was willing to wait.
“Hinata...” Naruto's eyes darkened with many emotions—but of those, she could not
perceive. His eyes were filled with mystery, a bottomless sea of enigma that
she could not decipher, even with
the power of her eyes.
“It-It's nothing,” she gushed while shaking risen hands in dismissal. “You don't have to think about that. Forget what I said. Oh, that's right,” she looked to the corner of the room and
got up to fetch whatever it is she had
placed there.
Hinata stood with
care, worried her balance might have been affected by the tinge of electricity
that still ran throughout her body. She walked across the room, lightheaded and
wobbly, and by this time—she was obstinate that her endeavor to change the
subject had prevailed.
Though, hadn't she
decided to refrain from reminding him of her confession on the battlefield? Well,
so much for that resolve.
“I-I baked you a cake... as a means of officially thanking you for
protecting me.” She smiled, as high-spirited as possible. “Pain might have realized I was still alive, if you hadn't started fighting with him
again.”
Nervousness continued to play over Hinata’s
body, like the wind through a rolling meadow of
beautiful but delicate flowers. It almost
crippled her—making it
harder to breathe, harder to think straight and harder to maintain her sincere facial
expression.
Her indignation and
sadness were gone, like liquid being exposed to temperatures far below zero
degrees, replacing it with massive glaciers of embarrassment.
While making her way across the room—back to the table—Hinata toppled in her clumsy state and
Naruto stood, hoping to save her, only to have a flying cake plaster all over his unsuspecting crotch.
“Oh crap,” he exclaimed with that dumb look on his face.
Na...Naruto-kun, Hinata's eyes were wide with horror, her forehead red from its impact to
the floor. “F-Forgive me,” she apologized almost instantaneously, and
then made haste to fetch a napkin after scraping herself up off the floor.
Kneeling before him, the young maiden did her best to wipe the chunk of calorie away—but unfortunately, that's not all she was
wiping away. She was
wiping away his composure, his rationality and his will to resist falling prone to temptation and having his way with her
as desire specifically commanded.
All the while
thinking that a girl had never before touched him in this way, Naruto's body went taut, his fingers stiffened and his
toes curled. There
was not a word upon his lips. He couldn't find his tongue, and it was not long
before he got a rather demanding erection.
Before Hinata could reach down to fetch another napkin, her eyes innocent
and cute, his vessel
begun tapping her forehead each time he throbbed. The princess was flabbergasted, and she froze,
when she realized where her wiping centered. And for a second that seemed to
stretch through to infinity, her heart and breathing stopped. It was as if she
were caught in a momentary state of suspended animation, and it wasn’t long
before a bright layer of pink rose from her collarbones to the crown of her
head, like a tide that was embarrassment.
W-What is this? What's this hard, warm thing from Naruto-kun on my forehead?
Hinata gasped, her eyes widening, when she finally understood just what exactly she had done to him. She had broken
something! She had unintentionally mutilated his body somehow and she would
never be forgiven for it.
With an incoherent flurry of words, Hinata stood awkwardly, trips
over her own feet again, and falls against him. They both tumbled to the floor, her
on top, and she could distinctly feel what she had done to him on her thigh, throbbing like a heartbeat.
Naruto's once
passive, almost morose aura was flaring now. And words couldn't possibly
explain what had become of Hinata's, but the fact that she had broken into a
sweat meant that it was nothing less than overwhelming.
Her sensitive chest was fast against the hardness of his, and she was already pulsing between her legs,
almost violently—a level of
sexual awareness that was completely new to her. She didn't know what to think
of it, but her body knew well what it yearned. However, did she possess the mental power
to dispose herself to its needs?
Naruto’s eyes were as wide as Hinata's, filled with shock, but hers soon half-lidded
with something else as desire rooted even
deeper into her core. Desire was not all she felt; however, there was a tight grip of guilt in
the pit of her stomach. She had done something very awful to her darling prince
and yet he did not whimper nor writhe in pain. There wasn’t even as much as a
crease in his forehead.
Instead, behind the
evident shock in his eyes, it would seem he was as lustful as she was. Now, the
maiden was as confused as she was sexually aroused.
She propped herself
up on her arms.
Time seemed to slow to this moment. Naruto
could hear the dangerous pace of Hinata's heartbeat, and her breaths came quicker through
parted lips—a sweet, cool breeze against his face. He could smell the fragrance of the
shampoo in her hair, the soap upon her skin and the freshness of her clothes.
Tresses of hair branched off along either
side of her face, her beautiful eyes obscured by the shadow cast by her bang. Naruto
then noted her rosy cheeks, and at the same time, examined and relished in the feel of her soft, warm body against his.
Below the tempting
curve of her lips, he allowed his eyes to journey from the hollow of her chin,
along the slender length of her throat, to the threshold of your enticing
cleavage. Her breasts were soft, smooth and creamy, he assumed, merely by a
brief glace. And it proved most difficult to tear is eyes away. Every fiber of
his being wanted to feel and taste them, and he knew it would only become
harder to resist with time.
Every passing moment, however embarrassing,
was a gift, a new experience and feeling for them both to savor. And they delighted in its taste, grace and glory, never wanting to
move, loathing the idea of this moment's inevitable end.
Finally, Naruto’s gaze shifted and settled on Hinata's unpainted lips. They were lovely,
and he couldn't help but note that they were thinner in comparison to Sakura's. They were thin but luscious,
making him wonder about their unique taste. Oh, how he yearned to have them on his.
Unable to help
himself, Naruto flashed a glace to her breasts again. Hinata's were by far larger
though, in comparison to Sakura's, that is. And he proceeded to think how they
would feel and fit in his hands.
A passionate light lit in her eyes, Hinata slowly
lowered her head—locks of
her hair caressing her prince's cheeks—and licked
the icing from the tip of his nose. It tickled, but the sensation made
Naruto throb rigidly in response nonetheless. And not only a few times, either.
Motivated by her decision in this—automatically,
intuitively, the young sage lifts his head. He watched as her eyes drift close, before he could lightly touch her chin with his lips. Her eyelids twitched, but her eyes
remained close, as if there was something more, something special and in particular,
that she was expecting him to do.
He knew just what
she was silently requesting. The truth of it rippled through her to him, like a
warm tide. And the idea lingered at the tip of his mind, coaxing him to proceed
with much passion.
Without a moment's
more thought, Naruto closed his eyes and gently brushed his lips against her
trembling lower lip. It felt like a soft, warm cloud beneath his, and as brief
as it was, “amazing” couldn't even been to describe the level of pleasure he
derived in that fleeing instant.
As for Hinata, her
entire body trembled in response and her nipples ripened against the force of
his chest. If her mind told her that this was wrong, then why did her body say
otherwise, and which one was she to heed?
Gradually, she reopened her eyes, when his head met
the floor once more. And after muttering a word of apology, she neared her face to his, so that she could brush his lips, in
an echo of his feat.
Their hearts thrash
together...
N-Naruto-kun's lips are on mine, she gasped inwardly. My-my first kiss...
When the maiden's
eyes reopened, after she raised her head, Naruto scrutinized her face
carefully. It was strange that he had never looked at Hinata in a certain light
before, until today. The girl was beautiful. She had a slightly round, childish
face, plump cheeks, and her silky hair was like a moonless night sky. Her eyes
were innocent, deep and gorgeous... but troubled. He could note the twinkle of
sadness that dwell within those mesmerizing depths.
Displeased with
this blemish that tainted—what he thought—was the epitome of beauty and grace,
Naruto decided to relinquish this measure of unhappiness. And with that, his
warm, velvet-like lips were pressing very softly against hers—a promise, a wish
and a resolution.
What neither one of
them was prepared for was her response.
Blood sizzled under
her pale skin, gushed throughout her veins and burned in her lips. Her breath
came in a wild, telling gasp, and her tiny fingers clasped the collars of his
bathrobe, clutching him to her. Her lips parted and her throat went dry, as she
breathed in his intoxicating scent.
“Hi-Hinata,” Naruto said calmly, when their lips were separated; when she was
finally able to yank back on the reins of her control. “Is this alright?” He asked slowly, watching her.
“Uh-Un,” she nodded her head, like a toddler that
had secretly done a bad deed. She took her time to steady her shaky breaths,
even though she had began—almost automatically—rubbing her centre on the
surface of his bent leg. “I-I love
Naruto-kun; so long as
it's Naruto-kun, it's okay.”
“Hinata…” he kept his face perfectly composed, though,
a peculiar gleam lit in his eyes—a soft light that Hinata apparently deemed
less a threat in her state of arousal.
Naruto could distinctly
feel the smoothness of her hindquarters, moving up and down his naked thigh. Her
slow and erotic movements, not to mention the heat between her legs, proved
unbelievably arousing. It made his erection greater. And all the while, he
could sense that she was getting wetter.
He knew exactly what it
meant, what with being forced to read Jiraiya's novels all the while upon their
travels. The man regarded it as training—the training of the mind, he always
assured with that big, ridiculous laugh.
For once, Naruto was
appreciative of that perverted side of his sensei. The man was probably looking
down on him right now, with that goofy grin and thumbs up… from somewhere.
“Why did you apologize
before?” Naruto's voice was low and repentant, but Hinata's keen eyes couldn't
dissect his expression. She wondered what he
could be sorry about, and her curiosity rooted deep, despite her sexual
cravings.
But more importantly, it
was better to bide her time in gathering herself to answer his question, his
embarrassing question, his heart-racking inquiry... god give her strength.
“I—” she hesitated, averting her gaze, “I did something to
hurt Naruto-kun.” Her words—no more than a
whisper—coincided with a strong pulsation of his masculine package. Her cheeks
were scarlet, when she glanced down in a telling gesture to where the bulge
pokes her thigh, and then met his curious eyes anew.
It didn’t take long for
Naruto to understand what she meant. And he looked down, as if the girl was
transparent, as if he could see past her creamy cleavage, to his pulsing pride.
His gaze soon bored
into hers once more. “Hinata, it's really not what you think.” he tried to stifle a smile of amusement,
though his lips still twitched.
“What...what do you
mean?”
“What you did... what
you feel,” he looked down again,” is actually well…umm…my dick.”
“Y-Your... dick...” Hinata repeated
casually, obviously confused and unaware of what she just reiterated.
Naruto smiled, finding
Hinata's ignorance in this to be quite interesting and adorable. How
delightful. He liked the fact that, in a sense, she was as naïve as he was. And
her shyness made him more relaxed and well…creative.
“It means... it means
that I'm aroused.” Her brows still slightly
creased in uncertainty. “It means that I find you incredibly attractive...that I like you a
whole lot and I want you to be mine. Hinata…I want to make love to you.”
Crash! Her composure
crumbled, shattered, like a sheet of glass against hard, jagged rocks. She
could only but hear the strident sound, as the pane of glass scattered into a
thousand glittering fragments. And she was certain he wouldn’t have given her
the time to recover the pieces.
Naruto smiled his breathtaking
smile again, stretching those perfect lips, and Hinata’s eyes propped wide
open, as she continued to process his confession. Like an old engine—far past
its prime—her heart slowed to a stall before pulsating; roaring back to life
with newly found vigor. Her pulse was erratic, and she could feel her blood
heating to a dangerous boil. Her temperature rose, her body overheating...
Just before the dominant,
beast-like heat surfaced far enough, however, to seize—like a cold-hearted
pirate—her consciousness, Naruto started to squeeze her breasts with curious
but gentle hands. Hinata responded, almost instantaneously, her eyes tightly
closed, her forehead creased with lines of delight. And her lips pursed and
then parted on a sweet breath.
Naruto had only dreamt
of moments like this—another craving listed in his super-duper long list of Uzumaki's Boyish Desires.
He had always thought
Sakura’s breasts would be his first. But then again, he wouldn’t want what happened
to Jiraiya many years ago, courtesy of Tsunade, to happen to him. Beaten to a
bloody pulp because of peeping or groping seemed to harsh of a punishment, if
you ask me. Just the thought gave him the shivers.
Hinata didn’t seem to
have a problem with being fondled by him; she squirmed in satisfaction on top
of him. And if anything else, she wanted more.
Naruto felt as though he
was in heaven, when he had successfully pushed the disturbing thought of being
clobbered into oblivion aside. Hinata’s breasts were warm and plush over her
dress. They filled his hands completely, and she made some low, provocative
sound beneath her breath, as he further indulged himself in this childish
fantasy.
His sensual caress soon
made her begin to feel a consistent series of pulsations, deep within her core,
more potent than before. His actions made it even harder to suppress the warm
liquid that trickled down her highly sensitive walls. She could feel it and for
some reason, it made her more self-conscious and embarrassed.
Quickly, Hinata sprang
to her feet from the temptingly soft yet firm, warm, masculine surface that was
his chest. She gazes at his attractive figure through apprehensive eyes, as
though he was the embodiment of ecstasy and irresistibility, sent by Cupid. He
was a creature no girl could possibly resist—a threat.
He was no threat to her,
however. She wanted him to make love
to her. After all, it was she who well…made
him erect, even if it was just a mere coincidence. And she didn’t regret any of
it.
Naruto's white teeth
flashed brilliantly. They seemed to shine against the many rays of light
beaming through the window, in his endeavor to subdue another smile wrought of
amusement. He gradually sat upright, his eyes calm yet seductive. “Oh, that's right,” he said, stealing her
breath for the one-hundredth time. “I never told you what I think.”
“W-What you thing,” she asked slowly,
her arms hugging her breasts, seemingly protecting them from his hungry eyes.
“Mmhmm,” he nodded his
head, his eyes smoldered. “You're very beautiful, Hinata. And I think your dress looks absolutely
amazing on you.”
Her eyes went wide with surprise.
And she lowered her head when she noted that he was studying her face,
seemingly pleased and harmlessly amused.
“Na…Na…Naruto-kun...I’m
not beautiful,” she disagreed. “And my dress is just, well...decent, not amazing.” Aye, that's what she
said, yet she blushed with pleasure at his compliment.
Fluently, like the
graceful flow of water, Naruto rose to his feet and hovered toward her. She
flinched, but she did not move away. He reached out to touch his fingertips to
her cheek, and shivers slithered up her spine. His expression was unfathomable,
but soon, she realized a tinge of sadness lining his handsome face.
“Hinata...I admit
sometimes I tend to sugar coat what I say—but I would never lie to you. Your
dress suits you perfectly and you're unbelievably beautiful.” Butterflies fluttered
in her stomach as his knuckles gently stroke her cheek. “You're wrong,” he whispered in her ear,
after skimming his lip over her ear lobe. “You're totally indecent—no one should
look so divine, so tempting, it's not fair.”
Hinata's eyes were
wide—again, her chest tightening, but she couldn't look away. Her eyes were imprisoned
by his. She could feel the heat of his body intermingling with hers, the convergence
making her feel the truth of his words. Her legs got weak, her panting breaths,
louder.
Temping... how? She thought to herself
mentally.
He pressed his warm lips
delicately to her forehead, and the room spun. Her body was highly aware of his
presence and his need, and that made it impossible to think.
“Shall I explain how
you’re tempting me?” he offered, his eyes still amused. It was clearly a rhetorical question,
she surmised, spying his fairly pronounced collarbones through the
loose-fitting garment.
His fingers traced
slowly down the slender column that was her spine. Her hands were limp on his
chest, and she felt lightheaded again. She knew she had fallen into dangerous
borders, but she could not tell him to stop. However irrational it was, she
wanted to tell him more.
Hinata had started
hyperventilating by the time Naruto tilted her head slowly and touched his warm
lips to hers for the second time, sucking them very lightly.
And then she collapsed.
“Hinata?” Naruto's voice was
alarmed as he caught her and held her up. “Are you alright,” he asked. “Say something!”
She only heard an
echoing, gradually diminishing murmur before her vision blurred and her eyes
drifted close. Though, just before that final thread snapped, which held her
mind and senses to reality, she not only found the mass that was her body braced fast against the wall, but both her tiny
hands that were laced with that of his. For a very brief moment, she noted the
difference in size, between his hands and her own.
His aura surged
then, flowing into her body, like a powerful counter to a sedative drug. Her
eyes popped open, and she drew in a breath, as though she had just resurfaced
after being submerged under water for far too long.
Unexpected, overwhelming,
revitalizing—a few words she could use to explain what she felt. It's as if he had
breathed new life into her. His energy, almost divine and sensual, was like the
hand of pleasure. It touched her body like a physical caress—coaxing her desire
to an even fiercer boil, and she began panting softly in response.
Being pinned by a
male, and one she was so deeply in love with, was definitely a first. And
although she felt awkward, her arousal was more distinct.
Awareness centered
at the point between
her thighs where his
leg squeezed, and his face buried in her neck. His breaths were hot on
her skin, and her lips parted in response.
She felt a primeval urge to coil her arms around him, but they were still
braced against the wall.
“Na...Naruto-kun,” she struggled between heavy breathing. “B-Be gentle with me, okay?” her voice was just high enough for
him to hear. I can feel Naruto’s leg bracing against my…
this is so very embarrassing. But…it feels good.
She might have told
him to be gentle, but Hinata found the way he handled her to be incredibly
erotic… unusual, but erotic. She hoped he wouldn’t release her, not yet at
least.
“Shh... Hinata,” he rests an index finger over her lips in
a graceful gesture that made her breath catch. “I need you to trust me. Allow me to make you
feel.” Let's see if all the time I spent proofreading Ero-Sennin's
perverted manuscripts paid off. I still remember most of the chapters from
Icha-Icha Tactics.
Hinata showed no signs of resistance, but
arousal and impatience was plain upon the young maiden’s face. It was evident in the
glitter of her eyes and the arch of her fine brows, the flush that kissed her
cheeks and the curve of her beautiful lips, and the way she would glance at him
before averting her torrid gaze.
Naruto found pleasure in the way she
breathed through parted lips and he cupped her face, urging the girl to look up
at the ninja that slightly towered over her. He was so
very strong yet humble, sensitive but resilient, and very beautiful. She still could not unravel the
mysteries she saw in the deepest depths of his eyes, but she could tell from
their steady glow what would come next.
Clasping her hands
together with one of his own now, slowly, Naruto skimmed the back of his fingers over her
shoulder, down her armpit, and back up again. She quivered, but her eyes were
still on his, trapped by the intensity of his telling gaze.
Hinata turned her face to the side, her heart
pounding, after he combed locks of hair behind her ear. But he used a single finger to tilt her chin,
aligning her face with his once more. He kissed her forehead tenderly before lightly pressing his warm lips against hers. The room didn't
spin this time, but she shuttered with need and released a breath of desire, when he pulled away.
Every so often,
Hinata could feel the tension building between her legs. Her clothes confided
her, and it was becoming uncomfortable; she needed to be naked. Again, she felt the need
to tell him more, but she couldn’t
find her tongue to utter such a demand.
Allow me to make you feel, the words echoed in her mind, yet it made
her throat parched. She wanted him completely to have his way. She was certain
he was curious and needy as much as she was, and she wanted him to explore and proceed at his
own pace. She
wanted him to grant her pleasure of his own free will. She wanted to be
possessed, loved, and marked by him.
Like a barren terrain, blessed with a
light drizzle of rain for the very first time, was how it felt as Naruto skimmed his
bottom lip across the fullness of hers. Hinata's lips were dry, and he made the journey again, but this time,
with his tongue. The mistress sighed in her delight and the moment her lips parted, he
subconsciously dipped his tongue inside of her mouth. It waged a frivolous war
with hers yet stilled reigned champion.
Hinata whimpered in indignation when
he withdrew his tongue, but then she started deliberating. She had absolutely
no idea a kiss could be done like that, not that she had ever been kissed
before now. She hadn't a clue what it was called, but she was certain she liked
it. She liked how his tongue glided tenderly over her quivering lips. She
especially pleasured the way he plunged inside of her mouth and probed her shy
tongue with his. She wanted, needed to feel that again.
They
were being led by their instincts, coated in desire and passion along this
beautiful journey of love, and she had no intention of straying from this paved
path.
His breath was hot on
her neck again, and then her ear, before Naruto spied the pert peaks of her
nipples protruding through her dress. Arrogantly, he wondered if he was the one
responsible for stimulating them to such hard peaks. And after careful
analysis, he released that she was not wearing a bra. The revelation made his
eyes blink wide open, and a smile tugged at his lips.
“Hinata…,” he said softy, letting
her hands down. She noted the tone of awkwardness in his voice, and was
surprised to find a steady blush in his cheeks—it was normally so elusive. “Can I…can I take your
dress off?”
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Well done man!! For this to be a fanfic, you captured the characters as if you were Kishimoto himself!!! If you're a writer, and you can capture the characters as perfectly as you did, you have great skill. This was written with great detail and respect to the characters and their respective personalities. For those of you reading this comment, if you're wondering, yes, this is completely worth your time! It's like reading Naruto in a novel format. ^_^ Enjoy!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for reading, and I appreciate your comment very much ^w ^)-
ReplyDeleteIt's very important that I preserve the characters' persona throughout the entire story. If not, that will only destroy its credibility and people's interest. I also refrained from using inappropriate words that could turn people off. No one wants to read about Hinata doing anything extremely unprecedented and messed, so I tried to keep her innocent.
I've never read a fan fiction before, and this is the 1st one that I've ever written. So, to show respect for my most favorite anime, I tried to do an exceptionally well job of recreating the characters and keeping it as Naruto-ish as is possible lol.
I'm working on a sequel right now, as requested by most of this story's readers, so be sure to stay tuned. Thanks again for the compliments.
Reading this was just like watching the anime this dude can take over from kishi and make naruto even better than it is know lol , wish some of you guys out there with skills would come up and animate this piece of work it would be great to watch this .
ReplyDeleteI just finished read Part I, and it was awesomeeeeee... :D
ReplyDeleteNow I want to continue to Part II... :)
Totally agree with Rakeen Lewis, hopefully this one can be drawn as doujinshi manga or as anime... I'll watch and read it over n over again... :p
Four thumbs up...
Ha-ha! I'm glad you liked it, man 'v ')-
DeleteAnd it would be totally mega--super-awesome if this could be doujinshi-rized or manga-rized! LoL!
This was absolutely fantastic.
ReplyDeleteNot only are the characters SPOT-ON, the research you've done is phenomenal! The little details are perfect. It is a huge sign of gratitude in Japan when a girl cleans a man's apartment for him. Also when Naruto says the Japanese equivalent of 'Bon Appetite!" before eating was awesome. Spot on. I love it when people know their stuff!
Hinata's innocence was adorable as well. I loved that you made her a good cook, I figure that would be a MUST if you were planning to be with a boy like Naruto, hell, all he knows how to make is Cup of Noodles. :)
The emotion that was used for Jiraya was also beautiful. You described it and expressed it wonderfully. Not too cliche, it was like you added another level to it. I always wanted more in the manga/anime from Naruto over the event. I feel like this completes it.
Which leads me to another point, the timeline you picked was really nice as well. Most stories either have no timeline (as if in an endless future) or are from a real common event. This was YOUR event, so you managed to keep the characters as who they were, but also make it your own. Really great!
Naruto's desire for the girl was also pretty spot on. You are totally right, if anyone is going to initiate anything - it'd have to be Naruto. ;D Her innocence, once again, adorable!
My only little thing about that scene was that you used the word 'nipple' and I don't know why, but it just personally turns me off (Hah, I know, it's not that big of a deal)... but when I write those scenes I know what the problem is - what word to use. Obviously you need to use innuendo, because who wants to hear the word 'penis' during a romatic scene? It ruins the moment a bit. (What a bother! *channeling my inner Shika*) I find a better word is areola, but that is only the skin around the teat. Oh, the word teat is annoying too. xD I guess it can't be helped. ;)
Overall, it was very professional and well written. Again, my only complaints are so little and stupid you can just ignore them (the text was a little too closely packed, and strained my eyes a bit... but I know you can't help that!) Seriously though, a marvelous work. Keep it up!